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miss rose
01-03-2019, 07:54 PM
Ok, this Mrs. Jackson Story isn't working for us is it...? :) So, i'm deciding to try something new.

I don't know how much time or energy i will have to finish this but, i'm going to make this short sweet, my own abstract creative fun art and simple, but meaningful.


Here in the city of pleasantville it is now leading up to Christmas time. A girl named Kate is feeling a bit empty. There is some desire in her heart that needed to be filled. She needed magic in her life, but she did not know where to go or how to get it. It is now afternoon and the snow falls down light and gentle. Kate is wearing a pretty red winter coat, with a vibrant green plaid scarf tucked around her neck. She has a beautiful golden broach pinned onto left side chest area of her coat. She has on a red hat that is a nice design. It is one of those round hats that you could wear tilted to the side of your head. She doesn't know where she is going. She had just decided to walk aimlessly down the streets. She was hoping to run into some adventure. She just so happened to be walking in the shopping area of her town. A particular mall catches her eye. She heads toward it and goes inside. It is beautiful inside, so fancy and elegant. Just to her left side is a big Christmas tree. It is all decked out, with presents underneath it just for show. She could not help but stop to admire the tree. It is so well lit up. All of a sudden a gentleman walked up to it and stood beside her. He to is admiring the tree. He is tall, handsome and had long black hair. His hair is in a pony tail. He had such beautifully sculpted side burns, which contrasted so nicely with his soft pale white skin. His jaw and cheek bones were so nice. He turned to face her as he could feel her staring at him. His eyes were well framed by his black long lashes. His brows were thick and a perfect shape. Kate couldn't help but be drawn in by this man. He smiled at her and said "Hi." She replies in a trance. "Hi." "Nice tree isn't it?" She snaps out of it. "Uh, yeah it is." The gentleman wasn't shy at all. Right away he introduces himself. "My name is Michael. What's yours?" He stretches a hand out to shake hers. This takes her by surprise. She reaches her hand out and shakes his. She replies. "My name is Kate."

miss rose
02-03-2019, 06:26 PM
Please,please, critique my work for me i'm trying to improve my creative expression in my writing, to get my ideas across more clear and to make my work more enjoyable, i have low writing self esteem.

miss rose
02-03-2019, 08:56 PM
MRS JACKSON
CHAPTER 2


The first project Kyla is working is "The Twilight Zone." She was given a script and a whole entire package of paper handouts on the what the plot will be about. She sits down in a big white comfy couch and curls up in it. She starts to read a few sheets of paper at a time, the rest are on the coffee table. The introduction is a man who acts as Rod Sterling. He mysteriously narrates a setting, time and place. Lights will be dim around him. In this scenario we are going to challenge three very important facts. We are going to ask the questions such as ; What is truth? What is justice? What is reality? Of cores, respectfully we know that the answers to these questions may very from Country to country, city to city and others in general. BUT, what if in some cases it would be helpful, in fact imperative for one to ask their own individual selves the three questions we have just mentioned. In this story, the people are going to embark on a journey which begs them to ask and carefully examine these questions, think for themselves and possibly dare to reconstruct these views. Now, of cores we know that some rules are logical, important, clear cut and not to be disrespected, but...this won't be the case in...(suspenseful music) THE TWILIGHT ZONE!


(how about i not even write this plot here and now... it belongs on set when the film crew are rolling...)


Twilight Zone Plot:
It is a lovely summer morning. The sky is blue, the clouds are white and the birds are chirping pleasantly. April steps out of her house and down her front porch to pick up the news paper. A pleasant neighbor rides by on a bicycle and waves hello to her, she waves back. She has a smile on her face because she is so content. The people here in her small home town are so friendly and wonderful to be around. One person is walking his small little dog, another person who goes by is jogging listening to some music. April feels a little guilty because she has it so good. Isn't it so good to have such a nice town where everybody in it is literally trust worthy, kind and wonderful in their personality. It's almost too perfect, it's like a utopia. She really wishes that everybody could be in such a world as hers, but of cores that is not realistic, not everybody could be in such a world. April lives in a town called "Happy Ville". Happy Ville is a place that has such a good reputation with a lot of people who visit there from out of town. Some of them are so content that they never even want to leave. Some people who visit there are...who knows, a little strange in their opinions about it. Why is that? She doesn't know, some people are hard to please sometimes. How does Happy Ville achieve it's Utopian world one may wonder? It doesn't really seem all that realistic for such a large group of people to come together and have such a profound determination to making something out of a novel exist in real life, cause you know, differences of opinion, personality and so forth. Well, the answer is simple, each and every individual has been carefully selected to live in this town. Each person has made a pact with themselves and the community, which is to follow certain rules. The only way for this delicate impossible to be achieved is if everybody agrees to do this. Well, what if they don't agree? Then sadly, they must leave Happy Ville. It's standard protocol that they do this, it's to protect Happy Ville. There's no harm in that really. The people who don't like it can leave and go live where they'd like to and the people in Happy Ville get to continue living their own version of what they perceive to be happiness, right? Even Steven. Moving on, April is 18 years old. It's a Saturday morning and some new visitors from out of town are coming over to stay with her and her family. She lives with her mom and dad who are very thankful and devoted to be living in their home town. April sips her coffee and picks up the news paper and goes back inside her house. It's a lovely day so she does not want to spend too long making sure the house is neat and tidy and everything is perfect for the new guests. Her and her parents had spent two weeks making sure the house was just right. (let me continue the rest in the next thread below, alright?)

miss rose
03-03-2019, 09:23 PM
Chapter 2 continued...

April is in the kitchen finishing her coffee that went with the already devoured breakfast. Her mother walks in and greets her. "Hi darling is everything okay today?" "Yes mom, everything is fine." Her mom kisses her on the head and says. "Remember the new guests from out of town are coming soon. It is our duty here in Happy Ville to make sure visitors feel 100% at home." "Yes mom, of cores." The mom's name is Lily. Liliy, goes into the living room to check on everything, because her, her husband and daughter had already spent two weeks making sure the house is neat and tidy. She wanted to double check, just to make everything precise. She adjusts the mini flower vase on the coffee table, fixes the couch pillows just so and voila , everything is perfect! The guests will be staying in the basement apartment. It's big and spacious and well furnished. The whole house is big and beautiful. That's the wonderful thing about Happy Ville, everybody has the perfect job and therefore perfect house! The guests don't need to worry, they are invited to make this house as if it were their own. They can share the resources and space as freely as they need to. The family's last name is Willson. The Willsons are expecting to have over two young people around April's age, a female and a male. They are best friends. This makes April rather excited because she has no siblings.

April and her mom Lily decide to go out in town to do something together. Something simple yet fun as mother and daughter, you know, before their guests arrive later on in the day. Lily's husband is till at home taking it easy this Saturday and maybe reading the news paper or something. The father's name is David. So, Lily and April go out into town. It is the kind of town that is very community oriented, they hold town meetings, festivals, carnivals, dance halls and stage theater plays and so forth. Lily and April decide to drop by in a shop that sells beautiful creative trinkets.
(ok, i just realized that this part of the story really should be saved for when Kyla starts to work on set. I will just summarize that she reads over script) (no, that's cruel. I'll just finish the plot and i'll move it to the appropriate section later ;) )

miss rose
03-03-2019, 09:33 PM
Dear Michael Jackson,

I just wanted to take this opportunity to say...
how deeply, deeply sorry i am for writing that bad fan fic that i previously got rid of.

:cry::cry::cry: here i am signing on here claiming to be a fan and friend...i i go and do something like that.

and of cores to all you fans out there who had to see it and read it. I am sorry, so profoundly sorry...
Please accept my apology and find it in all your hearts to forgive me.

miss rose
04-03-2019, 10:20 PM
Please ignore this and the rest down below. This is an old story, or plot.



MRS. JACKSON

chapter 3

miss rose
07-03-2019, 08:21 PM
chapter 4 deleted

miss rose
07-03-2019, 10:49 PM
Hi people. As you know the above plot in chapter one and two is the new story in the making. Hope it sounds good.
Peace and love keep on Michael-ing. :billiejean:

miss rose
12-03-2019, 06:58 PM
Thanks for your patients and support new story being worked on.

miss rose
14-03-2019, 05:25 PM
You guys something scary almost happened. I couldn't login here yesterday. I barely got in today. So, in case of emergency here are a few reading parts.

They are all below this thread.

(ignore this thread, it's from old fan fic.)

miss rose
14-03-2019, 05:28 PM
Chapter 4 of old story deleted

miss rose
14-03-2019, 05:34 PM
Chapter 5 gone

miss rose
15-03-2019, 08:26 PM
The next part is below the star line in chapter 5. Enjoy! :cool:

miss rose
16-03-2019, 10:35 PM
Hmm...i don't know if you all are ready for another part...:rolleyes: you know what i'll post. :yes: You don't have to hurry yourselves in reading it. Hehe...

miss rose
16-03-2019, 10:47 PM
I am feeling deeply depressed about something . I really don't have the emotional strength to post another part...excuse me.

miss rose
16-03-2019, 11:24 PM
this chapter gone.

miss rose
18-03-2019, 07:36 PM
Wow...i didn't know i'd get so many loylay followers. I mean not too many people have told me anything, but just by looking at how many views my thread is getting...i can tell i have supporters and i just want to say thak you all ! I appreciate it very much ! :o :laughing:

miss rose
18-03-2019, 07:39 PM
this chapter gone.

miss rose
21-03-2019, 11:59 PM
deleted chapter

miss rose
04-04-2019, 07:49 PM
I apologize for this. but this need to be a different story, if possible.

miss rose
04-04-2019, 07:51 PM
if you guys look at chapter one you will see a nicer story and very interesting too, is in the making.

miss rose
09-04-2019, 09:34 PM
Hey everyone, i just wanted to remind you of my deepest appreciation for your undying support of my story. Without you , the little people, it could never have been a success. So, i just want to say...thank you, thank you...


:laurelhardydancing:

miss rose
09-04-2019, 10:16 PM
Woe, i can see you are all ready for a next part. Well, alright then, just give 20 mins.

miss rose
09-04-2019, 10:41 PM
Chapter 8




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miss rose
28-04-2019, 12:23 AM
hey there everyone. I know i took a while, but you know how it is, one can only post a fn fic when one has opportunity. Anyways, with out further delay..here is the next part.:listeningtomusic

miss rose
28-04-2019, 12:25 AM
Chapt. 8 contd...


End of chapter 8

Magicgirl
30-05-2019, 09:02 PM
Well, this is a very long story, it is nice, but the whole situation in it sounds senseless and absurd. Probably was better if MJ was not mentioned at all in this story, you could think of some fictional pop-star, because first it is more about a married woman's affair and her boyfriend and second with MJ as one of the characters it is hard to believe in it all. What concerns the style of writing - I like it, you did a great job. I wonder what will be a happy end and for whom.

miss rose
01-06-2019, 09:27 PM
thank you Magic Girl for your honest and sincere in put. :). Umm i was planning to make this controversial. I'm taking my time with each part because i want everything to sound just right. I'm glad i did this long enough for a fan to tell me their real feelings on this.

miss rose
02-06-2019, 10:53 PM
anyways there is a next part coming up that "Might" cheer everyone up.

Magicgirl
23-06-2019, 08:19 PM
then looking forward for the next part

miss rose
16-08-2019, 07:04 PM
magic girl and others new story is on the way...possibly. I apologize for all and any offense and in convenience...

miss rose
16-08-2019, 07:05 PM
okay...it looks like i am back up. Thank you everyone for your kindness and a second chance...

StageGlitter
16-08-2019, 08:36 PM
Interesting plot. Hmm.

miss rose
16-08-2019, 08:39 PM
why thank you stage glitter :listeningtomusic

Magicgirl
24-08-2019, 05:27 PM
yes, we are looking forward for it.