Spaceship
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Let's not wait until the sun is out
Let's get up and let's get out
Um, no. Rhyming with the same word is lazy. It should be
Let's not wait until the sun is out
Let's get up and let's go shout
Improvement.
It's the day, brand new day
Let's both go outside and play
Uh, "let's both go outside and play" in a sex song? Cringe. It should be
It's the day, grand old day
Let's both go outside and pray
Improvement.
Let us walk down the park
Making love til it's dark
Why would you be making love at a park? Indecent exposure. It should be
Let us walk down the park
Singing songs til it's dark (or alternatively, sing a song til it's dark)
Improvement.
Let's get up and let's get out
Um, no. Rhyming with the same word is lazy. It should be
Let's not wait until the sun is out
Let's get up and let's go shout
Improvement.
It's the day, brand new day
Let's both go outside and play
Uh, "let's both go outside and play" in a sex song? Cringe. It should be
It's the day, grand old day
Let's both go outside and pray
Improvement.
Let us walk down the park
Making love til it's dark
Why would you be making love at a park? Indecent exposure. It should be
Let us walk down the park
Singing songs til it's dark (or alternatively, sing a song til it's dark)
Improvement.
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